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By: ban

ban — Sat, 29 Aug 2009 12:08:30 +0000

Lowe's has a neat one.

http://www.lowescreativeideas.com/#

By: Abby Normal

Abby Normal — Fri, 28 Aug 2009 17:16:37 +0000

omg Abby, you are a genius
you should do it, get all the neighbours dogs in to have their own personal indoor piss place
you could breed a few exotic birds(the animal kind) and make a few quid

By: p3

p3 — Fri, 28 Aug 2009 10:50:37 +0000

My suggestion is to read, read, read other published poets poetry and see how they write. Learn vocabulary, grammar and English structure.
I can see right off the bat you need to learn English structure and vocabulary and grammar. It's then I watched it fly away–not then i watched it flew. Fly away from me–not flew by me-things of this nature need to be rewritten. You'll get the hang of it if you keep at it and study writing. Don't stop just because someone says you have problems–go fix them and be good at what you love. I'm not trying to be mean–I'm trying to help you. I had to start at the bottom with lots of problems and sometimes I have still have problems with a poem so I just work it out. Go for it!

By: pretty sexy chick

pretty sexy chick — Fri, 28 Aug 2009 07:58:38 +0000

Why not try eBay?

Try running a search for "room divider screen".

I tried it myself and saw some really nice ones.

By: Valkyrie™

Valkyrie™ — Thu, 27 Aug 2009 13:12:07 +0000

After a pet Sith and a Bigfoot, a donkey is not that strange
Perhaps your brought it home from that Party
You know the one with the gorilla in a pink tutu, and the guy upside down with his head in a bucket

By: Lisa

Lisa — Thu, 27 Aug 2009 13:04:48 +0000

Don't get me started on this topic. Things we have left to do are:

* Pack up everything and move house 800 miles. Yeah, fun.
* Paint baby's room, pull up carpet, lay new flooring.
* Buy everything. I've so far got 3 clothing items for the baby and that's it.

And I have just over 5 weeks left…. aarrrggghhhhh!

By: melissa

melissa — Wed, 26 Aug 2009 14:00:18 +0000

Hi Melissa, here's my constructive criticism hopefully it will help you refine your poem (whether you agree with it or not–and that's ok either way).

Writing about writing is tough. It usually comes across as too static and boring (not as bad as poems about writer's block). So from the very start you've dug a hole that you have to climb out of with many readers. Doesn't mean you can't do it, but realize that it's there.

To your poem: (S=Stanza L= Line)

S1 L4: This reads very akwardly. The syntax feels off.

S2 L1: "my pain". This is an abstraction. You are telling us something when it would be more effective if you showed us what your pain meant with a more concrete noun.

S2 L2: "truth" is also abstract but it doesn't bother me as much as "pain" did.

S2 L4: I don't like the dual repetition of truth here between L2 and L4.

S3 L2 & 4: I don't really like the dual repetitioon of love here.

These dual repetitions might work if you carried it through every stanza, but I'd have to see that first to really know.

S4 L4-6: This reads really clunky. You need to smooth this out.

Well, those are my comments. I'm not trying to be harsh with them. I hope that isn't the tone that came across. I like to read good poems, and with some rewrites this has potential–and rewriting is something all of us need with our work to get better(at least it's true with mine).

I hope that helps.

By: rotten_toast

rotten_toast — Wed, 26 Aug 2009 10:15:58 +0000

I just build a 5 feet wide by 7 feet tall bookcase. It is oak, materials were about $120, my time was about 20 hours without finishing, add another 10 hours for finishing. My guess is you are looking at $1,200 for the two, could be much more though depending on wood species and complexity.

By: ? Heart Breaker ?

? Heart Breaker ? — Wed, 26 Aug 2009 09:59:56 +0000

GET UR BOYFRiEND TO PUT iT UP FROM SPENCERS ““`